English native speakers: Who likes to do me a little favor?

[Kirsten]

Thank you very much for your help and suggestions! See, I still have to learn a lot!

I wasn't sure if I should use "Art" or "Arts" as a title, as I'm referring to HER art... But you think ART would be the better choice, right?


About the first sentence on the start page:

I wanted the part of the details in nature at the beginning of the setence, as she meant it as a connection to the Seneca quote above. That's why I've chosen Cataholic's suggestion:

Giving the details in nature attention and expression is the wish of the artist, Dr. Sylvia Inderwiesen.



And what about the text in her vita? That was especially hard! LOL

The way [she meant "her way" here, but wrote "the way" In German] led from photography to painting and therein, inevitably to realism. Despite a strong interest in arts, the artist decided to study veterinary medicine, an occupation that she still loves and still practices in her own vet clinic. Painting is important to her. It's creating a compensation [would "balance" be better?] to job and family. To immerse herself into details, to emphasize them in their extensions, are her favoured motifs.


Any suggestions?

Thanks, Kirsten

[Pawsitive Thinking]

The way [she meant "her way" here, but wrote "the way" In German] led from photography to painting and therein, inevitably to realism.

Instead of "the way" what about using "her route/path".

Would take out "therein"


Despite a strong interest in arts, the artist decided to study veterinary medicine, an occupation that she still loves and still practices in her own vet clinic. Painting is important to her.

It's creating a compensation [would "balance" be better?] to job and family.

"creating a balance between job and family"

To immerse herself into details, to emphasize them in their extensions, are her favoured motifs

"Her favourite style is to show and magnify the details of her subjects"

Still not sure about the last one - a bit awkward. Would also use "art" instead of arts

[Kirsten]

Thanks a lot!

I've edited the text now!

Kirsten