ILoveMyAbbyGirl, You are e VERY good writer! How old are you?? I am curious because I used to teach 9-12 English. Are you in college? If you are still in school, I am sure your teachers have noticed your writing. Is this something you plan to keep doing? You use a lot of good techniques as well. Good use of dialog, detail, and emotional insite. I am impressed!!
Have a title yet? That is always hard. Usually comes to you well after the piece is finished. Do you have your ending in mind? Will this be a short story do you think? Well, keep writing because you have my interest!!