Great Job

I hope you don't mind a couple of suggestions ....

I would also add if two cats are a bonded pair, like the sisters. If you mention that they would love to go together, you might get two adoptions instead of one.

I liked the way you are positive about small problems like beautiful Treats eyes. But I would also add if these cats need any ongoing treatment or consideration. If people know specifically if a treatment is needed and what that is, they are more likely to come forward.

But these are only improvement suggestions, your write ups are very very good. I bet those shelter kitties love their new shelter mummy.