Quote Originally Posted by CountryWolf07 View Post
I am hoping someone on here can help me improve my cover letter which will be sent to a couple daycare/childcare centers around where I live that I want to apply to and use my art skills with young kids and also sign language as well. Here is what I have so far.. I am horrible with cover letters and especially when it comes to writing! Help out, please? Thanks!


"To whom it may concern,
(1)As a recent graduate from The Ohio State University with a Bachelors of Art degree from the College of Arts, I am looking for an opportunity to utilize my creativity, art education. (2) I feel with children, art is a different world of expanding their vision of what they see in their world and want to share with us by expressing their feelings and thoughts through a drawing or a painting. (3) Encouragement to allow them to do so offers them to be creative. (4) As a individual with a hearing impairment, I feel with an advantage, I am able to assist with sign language to young children, help them expand their minds."

Two things. I numbered the sentences in your letter so my post is shorter and makes more sense.
Sentence #2 - change the phrase "art is a different world" just slightly so the word "world" isn't in the sentence twice - I want it to read that art gives children an opportunity to expand their vision of what they see in their world and want to share with others. But I can't think of a stronger word than opportunity. Maybe experience? Art gives children the experience of expanding their vision of what they see in their world and seek to share with others. (??)
Sentence #4 - I want it to be much stronger because I think knowing sign language is a huge advantage. How about something like this: "As an individual with a hearing impairment, I bring the advantage of assisting with sign language to young children to help them expand their minds."

Catty1? Karen? You are both so good with words - can you help me here?
Thanks,
elyse