Quote Originally Posted by Karen
Okay, you need to add more shading, and that'll diminsh the "lines" of the nose as well.

Right now, her nose if far too wide at the top. Look at the original, see those darker grey areas, particuarly to the right of the bridge of her nose? add some shading in there.

Then you can add shading to better "shape" her chin, and the side of her face as well, which will narrow it some, visually.

So attached, I blocked in pink where shading would help redefine areas. The nose - see the green I put that nearly a heart-shaped area at the end of her nose? that's the "unshaded" shape you'd have left. Don't be afraid to add more definition, and more of an angle to her nostrils - remember, the poor gal's gotta breathe, right?

And if it is pencil, which it looks like it is, you can mostly erase the vertical line you drew in for her teeth, just leave barely a suggestion.


Almost forgot - the yellow mark I made - you left her too much forehead - she doesn't need a broad expanse like mine! So you can easily add more hair to fix that!
I agree with what Karen and Husky mom said. It's a really good base you've got, but to give it more dimension, and more shading around the nose and maybe a little around the eyes. At the moment, i'm just scanning threads because i'm a bit pushed for time on PT what with helping to sort out my grandad's funeral and stuff but if you ever want advice or help then i will gladly help you if you pm me