Oh no! Poor Ari! I too hope she doesn't die. :( Poor little girl.
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Oh no! Poor Ari! I too hope she doesn't die. :( Poor little girl.
Small update for those who are worried about our Ari girl...
Someone was lifting me up. I was too weak to even cry. I was draped in the persons arms, and I was still having trouble breathing. They carried me to the car and layed me on a towel. I had so much running through my head I wasn't even listening to what was going on around me.
good she was saved!! but who? hehe More More!!!
Someone was lifting me up. I was too weak to even cry. I was draped in the persons arms, and I was still having trouble breathing. They carried me to the car and layed me on a towel. I had so much running through my head I wasn't even listening to what was going on around me. We arrived at the same white coat who cared for me before. She looked at me and listened to my heart with a cold stethoscope. I closed my eyes. I didn't know if I could make it. I breathed long, heavy breaths.
They rushed me into the back and put me under again. I had a dreamless sleep. I woke up in more pain then explainable. My leg was once again in a cast, as well as my chest. I opened my eyes and found myself in a small cage. I was still with the vet, and I was wrapped up in some blankets. Beside me I saw some food and water. I tried as hard as I could to get up, and I failed, barely even being able to lift my head. I cried out in pain and I took short breaths, to keep from hurting myself. The nurse came back to me, and slowly stroked my head. She must have read my mind, because she brought the food bowl closer to me so I could eat. I thumped my tail with all my might, and she smiled at me.
"You'll be fine girl. We've got someone here to see you." she said.
....and then........:eek: :eek:
come on...who's there to see her.....it BETTER not be Jason!!!
:( :( Poor Ari. Reminds me of when I cared for a Beagle a while ago when I was younger who ahd been hit by a car in front of my house, actually hit by a huge F-250 and the assholes just kept on driving... then I eventually had to give her back to the owners which I thought was total BS after we cared for her and paid the vet bills. I cried for so long. :( :(
"You'll be fine girl. We've got someone here to see you." she said. I looked around. I saw 2 people. One person I didn't know, and the other... was Amanda.
I gave it my all and got up. The doctor tried pushing me back down, but I had worked up all my strength to get to Amanda.
Not only that, but I think it would make an excellent movie too. :DQuote:
Originally posted by Amber
I think this should be published!!!!!
Yes, Ari's alive! And thank God Amanda came to see her. Can't wait for more, this is really good! :)
Originally posted by FloppsyLadySally89
I So AGREE!!!Quote:
Not only that, but I think it would make an excellent movie too.
I gave it my all and got up. The doctor tried pushing me back down, but I had worked up all my strength to get to Amanda. I finally reached her and my tail was wagging so hard I had made everyone in the room stop. Amanda was crying and so was the mysterious second person. The vet was crying, and then I saw one of the best things ever. Amanda had brought Carson!!
I ran over and kissed him all over. Amanda was still crying and they told me who the mysterious second person was. It was the man who had saved me. Also the man whose barn I was sleeping in. He came over and gave me a gentle pat on the back. I kissed him all over, too. Then one last surprise. Standing in the doorway was Jason.
NOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!! Jason you ruin everything!!!!!
Jason..............you've GOT to be kidding!!!
NO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:mad: :mad: :mad:
I have a question what breed is Ari?? or is she a cute mutt?
Noooo, not Jason! :( :mad:
I meant for Ari to be a Brittany Spaniel, but I never really said what she was.
Chapter 5: The Dispute
I looked at him. He sort of gave me this look that meant he was really angry, but he felt bad because I was hurt. His mother and father were with him and they didn't bother to look at me. I didn't go to say hi to him. I turned around and went back to Amanda. She kissed my forehead and looked around nervously. Jason stepped toward me, and I went back to my cage and layed down. The vet look suspiciously at Jason, who looked at me with pure anger in his eyes.
"It seems to me she is scared of you, Jason." the vet said, closing my door. "When she was brought in, she had a chain around her neck. She was horribly skinny. I suggest you give this dog to a better home. Immediately." The vet said.
Ari would like to share some pictures with you.
"This is me and my siblings, a few days old. I'm the first one on the left!"
http://members.rogers.com/ataboy/images/spicepups2.jpg
"Here we are, just born."
http://members.rogers.com/ataboy/images/spicepups1.jpg
"And at 3.5 weeks old."
http://members.rogers.com/ataboy/images/spicepups4.jpg
"Last but not least, me when I was given to Jason."
http://members.rogers.com/ataboy/images/spice7.jpg
Thankyou vet for speaking for the little pup!
aww very cute pictures Ari!
Yes! What a great vet. I hope she gets to live with Amanda and Carson. :D
And what great pics! They are so adorable, and it helps me picture what is going on in the story better now that I know what she looks like. :)
Here's Carson when he was a baby. What a cutie!
http://www.german-shepherd.com/images/9_week_puppy.jpg
"It seems to me she is scared of you, Jason." the vet said, closing my door. "When she was brought in, she had a chain around her neck. She was horribly skinny. I suggest you give this dog to a better home. Immediately." The vet said.
"Um yeah. I wanted to do that, but she ran away. Would you like her?" Jason asked, looking at Amanda. Amanda started to cry again, and they started filling out adoption papers.
"I'm so glad you're okay." Carson said, still trying to lick me through the bars of my cage.
"I'll survive." I said lifting my head. Amanda had run back over to me and was opening the cage door when Jason appeared behind her.
"Bye Ari." he said and left.
"What a mean jerk Ari. It's okay. You're coming to live with me girl! Me and Carson!" Carson must have understood what she said because he immediately began to wag his tail and jump all over Amanda.
Great story.
It needs some grammar help, I suggest you bring it to your English teacher. :)
Woo Hoo!!!! Good Good Good.........
okay..... more!!
WONDERFUL!!!!
More!!!
Kay-
Sorry my grammar isn't perfect, I'm writing 300 miles a minute right now. It's the thought that counts though? Right?
There is no need to say sorry, I meant nothing of it. :) Cami's Amber told me that you thought I was being mean. I honestly meant nothing of it. There's just alot of "and"s among other things that are out of place our shouldn't be there. I was just trying to help you if you really do want your story published.
My grammar isn't perfect either.
I don't think Kfamr was being mean. All GOOD writers need to be really good about criticism.
The important thing, Aly, is that you're writing and you're getting an audience. I suggest you write as much as you can, save it in a Word program, print it out and ask your English teacher to review it so that you can do the fine tuning.
But don't stop! And see all criticisms as wonderful gifts to help you become the best writer you can be!
Small update..
Chapter 6: Back to Amanda's
I had to stay at the hospital for a few days, but Amanda stayed as long as she could. The day I went home was the best day of my life. To make things even better, Amanda had contacted my Mom's owner and gotten the names of everyone who had taken a puppy the day Jason took me. She had arranged for everyone to meet at the local park.
PS> We got things worked out Soledad. It's ok!
GREAT STORY!!!!!!!!! Sorry I haven't posted before now, you just kept writing and writing and writing......;)
This is sooooooo good. You are a great author, this shoul be published:D
MORE! MORE! MOOOOOORE!!!!!!!!!!!
You guys im sooooo tired lol i've been online 8 HOURS writing this!!! lol ill write a little more tonight maybe.
bumpies
It's great so far, keep writing! You seem to have a knack for it. :)
I LOVE IT!
I absolutly love it! Post somre more please :D
Ash
I can't wait for more!! You've done an AWSOME job!
I'll be waiting!
Ahh... I'm back... Gotta vaccuum the living room and then I will start typing!
Chapter 6: Back to Amanda's
I had to stay at the hospital for a few days, but Amanda stayed as long as she could. The day I went home was the best day of my life. To make things even better, Amanda had contacted my Mom's owner and gotten the names of everyone who had taken a puppy the day Jason took me. She had arranged for everyone to meet at the local park.
I awaited the day with as much patience as I could. I kept bugging Amanda until we finally left.
"Ari, what are you so excited about? We're only going to the park. We go all the time." Carson said to me as we got in the car. He soon realized what he had said.
"Sorry. You didn't go much with Jason, did you?" he asked.
"Nope. But I'm excited cuz I get to see Tia! My sister!" I said sticking my head out the window.
We got to the park about 20 minutes later. Amanda had insisted on changing my bandage quick before she let me go. I still had a cast on my front leg, but I felt great. Amanda was quielty lecturing me before she let me out of the car.
"Play carefully. You are still recovering, Ar." she told me. Okay okay. Let me GO! I wanted to say. I was totally ready. I could see Tia, and oh! There was Willow! And Mac... and Levi! This had to be by far, one of the best days of my life.
Amanda hooked me and Carson on a leash and proceeded over to the picnic area. Everyone greeted her with great kindness and asked what happened to me.
"Long story made short, she was abused and I offered to take her. She is a great dog." she said bending down to unleash both me and Carson.
*bum bum bummmmmmmm*
Something is happening in the story... but to who?
Is no one concerned??? Where is everyone? :D
Amanda hooked me and Carson on a leash and proceeded over to the picnic area. Everyone greeted her with great kindness and asked what happened to me.
"Long story made short, she was abused and I offered to take her. She is a great dog." she said bending down to unleash both me and Carson. I took off towards Tia.
"TIA!" I yelled as I ran to her. She looked up at me and I saw her smile.
"Ari!! Omigosh! What happened to you? Oh, Ari! You look horrible! Are you okay?" she kept throwing questions at me before I had a chance to explain. I wanted to explain but I decided it was best to explain it all at once. I called everyone over; Willow, Levi, Mac, Glory, Mika and Zeus.
"Woah, Ari, what happened?" Zeus asked.
"Okay. Glory, you remember the person that took me right?" I asked her.
She nodded. I went on with the story and when I was done, everyone was looking at me in astonishment.
"You went through all of that in this short of time?" Willow asked.
"Yeah, but I'm with Amanda now. By the way this is Carson." I looked over at Carson who was standing next to me, oddly very quiet.
"What's the matter Carson?" I asked him.
"I... um... I'm not feeling too well. I'm going to go sit by Amanda." he said, then walked away.
"Guys, I'm gonna go check on him. Something's not right." I said walking over to where Amanda was sitting. I looked at Carson, who was looking pale, and he also looked like me might pass out. I nudged his nose, and he just sat there.
"Are you okay?" I asked, growing concerned. He didn't answer me.
MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!
What's happening to Carson?
MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
"Are you okay?" I asked, growing concerned. He didn't answer me. I knew something was wrong. I nudged Amanda.
"What do you want-- Carson! What's wrong baby?" She said stooping down to his level. She picked him up.
"Sorry to cut the meeting so short. I think he needs a vet." she said, looking frantically for our leashes. I showed her I didn't need my leash. I ran to the car and she followed me. She opened the door and I jumped in, scooting over so she could lay Carson down. His breathing had slowed down, like he was sleeping. I layed down and looked at him.
"Tell me what's wrong Carson. Come on. What's wrong??" I asked, pleadingly. He just closed his eyes slowly like he was falling asleep.
"CARSON!" I yelled, to wake him up.
"Stay with us Cars..." Amanda said from the front seat. I could see in the rearview mirror she was fighting back tears.